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So, I'm just going to put this out from the start and be honest...I know this character will be a bit unorthodox and I'm going to be asking for some things potentially not covered by the policies or that need special approval. I'm going to try to make the character fair and not blatantly OP but for the purpose I'm planning for the character it will need to be powerful to achieve it's goals.
I'm asking for the sorting/admin team to trust me to some extent though not blindly...please ask any questions you have and I will do my best to explain my thought process or purpose. I tried to do my best to write everything out in detail hoping to explain in many words to help cover anything I may have accidentally not explained well. That being said having a normal user with a character like this does require some trust from the admin team not to misuse or abuse it and hopefully I've been here long enough that you know the type of person and RPer I am to approve it. Even once it's approved if there are issues just talk to me and let me know and we'll see what we can work out.
The first of course is the single name. The character is both a half-nymph and the name itself is one adopted by the character discarding the name that was given at birth. If needed I can give the character the birth name though they will have discarded it by this point.
Thanks! Bond_em7 (Owl Me) 15:16, March 21, 2019 (UTC)
1) Give a description of your character's personality. It must be at least two paragraphs long, seven sentences each.
Dawn's a passionate person who hates inequality and will stand up and speak out against it anywhere she sees it. She is a fiery revolutionary that speaks out against injustice where she sees it doing what she can to break the grip of those in power. Her most used weapons to fight oppression are her words and natural nymph talents. She is particularly gifted in oration and utilizes her ability to influence the emotions of those who hear her to be able to easily get those who are being oppressed to join her cause. She makes no secret of her abilities which usually cause a odd duality in those working with here...they follow her in the cause yet also don't necessarily trust her personally as they know she's influencing their emotions. Despite this she trusts and is devoted to those who choose to follow her lead and does her best to protect and care for them as much as she can given the types of situations they may find themselves in.
Dawn is a strong leader and doesn't bend or break under pressure. She's smart and plans ahead doing everything she can to make sure her movements come to fruition. She instills her follows with confidence even without her gifts and is excellent at motivating and bolstering her allies confidence in both themselves and their cause. She is passionate and while controlled by her emotions she also does her best to only allow positive emotion control her not losing herself to the darker emotions. She is excellent at reading people both through her gifts and through her normal senses. She can be stubborn especially when it comes to what she believes is right and doesn't back down. The best way to describe her would be as a crusader.
2) Write about the history of your character. How did they grow up? Is there an incident that made them the way they are? It must be at least three paragraphs long, seven sentences each.
Sarah Personne is the only child of a female Nymph who called herself Mind-Shadow and a Muggle French man named Gabriel Martin. They met one night in a pub and without a spoken word she seduced the attractive man bringing him up to her room. The next morning she was gone and the man felt conflicted having quite enjoyed the evening but also wondering if the whole things had only been a dream. Mind-Shadow never expected to have a child with the man but carried it to term as she wandered. Once she had the baby she knew she wouldn't be able to care for it so she found a nearby orphanage where she sensed some magical talent inside and left the baby.
Sarah grew up at the orphanage in Syria he mother had left her at knowing nothing about either of her parents or her own nature. She clearly wasn't from the middle east given her light complexion and hair but she has no idea where she is from or if she has any family. The orphanage was underfunded and run by a thief named Helgenish that had the children gather money by stealing, conning, and begging bringing it back to him. The children whispered that Helgenish had some sort of magical ability which let him avoid the authorities and let him know if they tried to run or escape. She quickly learned the trades taught to her and found her looks were a curiosity that made people pay attention to her or give more than they might the other kids. She didn't suspect until much later that her magical gifts might also have played a part. Her first magical incident was when she was six and stealing some fruit to help feed herself. Unknown to her the shopkeeper noticed her and was moving over to confront her about the theft when he was hit by a sudden feeling of calm and decided it wasn't worth it over a piece of fruit. Her "luck" as she called it helped her be able to steal more and not get caught better than any of the others. Subsequently she grew up as one of Helgenish's favorites which meant she occasionally got a bit more food and didn't get beaten as often for failing to bring in what he expected. She didn't know it but Ministry officials visited Helgenish who was surprised to learn the girl had magic but was more than eager to explain to them he would take care of her magical education.
As she grew older she did her best to stick up for the other kids trying to protect them from the hellish living conditions or the oppression by Helgenish. She would try to get extra and give it to the others so they didn't get beaten to the point of not having enough for herself and taking a beating in their place. She considered the other kids in her care, regardless of if they were older, boy or girl, and even regardless of how they treated her. Most welcomed her help but a boy a couple years older than her named Adnan seemed to hate her spurring her help at every turn and actively trying to get her in trouble for helping the others. He wanted to prove himself to Helgenish and become his right hand man and felt Sarah was a threat to that. The two of them were often at odds and while Helgenish protected Sarah from Adnan hurting her directly she often received extra beatings from Helgenish due to Adnan's weaseling ways and lies. Despite his hate and the pain he cause she still did her best to help the others and didn't try to fight Adnan back realizing he was in the same position she was and that she didn't want to sink to her level.
When she turned fourteen she learned something new about Helgenish...that he was also a pimp in the prostitution industry and that as the children, both boys and girls, in the orphanage aged they were expected to also sell their bodies to clients for him. He also used them for his own personal playthings and broke them into the industry for the first time himself. He grabbed her and started kissing and touching her despite her cries and pleas. Looking around the room for some way to try to protect herself she saw Adnan in the corner beaten. As she continued to fight she was stripped and Helgenish turned his back on Adnan who rose and jumped at him with a knife clearly intending to kill him. Helgenish turned faster than Sarah though should be possible and flicked Adnan in the chest with one finger somehow throwing him across the room and into the wall. Sarah had no idea how he was doing the things he was...it must have been some sort of magic. The knife he'd been holding flew through the air seemingly controlled by some invisible hand and embedded itself solidly in his chest causing his eyes to widen and then for him to slump over. Helgenish turned back to Sarah moving to resume what he's started with her clearly not caring he'd just killed Adnan or that there was a body in the room and blood spreading out on the floor. Sarah realized then that Helgenish was going to kill her. Probably not tonight but if she didn't fight and escape tonight he would be the ultimate cause of her death...just like he'd killed Adnan.
Something inside her flared up and her purple eyes began glowing with an eerie light. She put her hand against Helgenish's forehead and instinctively pushed her own pain, fear, and despair into him. Helgenish staggered against the assault completely overwhelmed by the strong emotions falling back and putting his hands to his head shuddering. Sarah didn't know exactly what she was doing or how but she followed her instincts and kept her hand pushed against his head feeling the emotions drain out of her and into him. After a minute she felt completely empty of emotions and again by instinct spoke to Helgenish her voice a whisper, "Go pick up the knife." To her surprise and shock he stood on shaky legs and moved over to Adnan's body pulling out the knife then looking at her from across the room. Now that he was out of her touch he seemed to start shaking off the effect and the rage began returning to him face. Sarah quickly stood and jumped at him getting her hand back on the side of his face and he once again began shaking incapacitated. "Now..." She whispered, "...cut your throat." He would shake his head and begin to whimper. She'd take a deep breath still feeling devoid of emotion and would moderate her tone trying to play on the emotions she could feel inside of him doing her best to sound like an inner voice. "You are a horrible person. You are scum and worthless. All you do is take and hurt and cause destruction. You really should end your own life and make the world a better place." He would slowly nod, as if to himself, then take the dagger and did as she had suggested. Turning to leave the place she found her own records and took them with her hoping they would tell her more about her parents. They didn't and her name wasn't likely to help her so she decided she would discard her old name and take a new and more hopeful one: Dawn.
Since then (10 years) Dawn has traveled learning about her own abilities and the magical world in general. She has visited a number of countries and found uses for her gifts and talents fighting against both magical and non-magical illegitimate governments, abusive authority figures, or brutal warlords. She usually sticks to third world countries or those who's governments are particularly brutal. The last large war in the wizarding world was happening just as she left Syria and she was able to join a small group of freedom fighters in Russia learning some basic magic from them and other survival skills against the brutal reign of Kaiser and the other Duxterran dictators. Meeting those people and living with them, lerning from them changed her life. She hadn't even realized how paranoid and messed up growing up in such a horrible place had made her. Though it was a rough time it allowed her to really bond with others and explore her Empathic abilities in a safe environment, and more importantly allowed her to heal and stop the slide into darkness her whole childhood and final act against Helgenish had been pushing her towards.
Her aim isn't at toppling governments but on the smaller scale of removing corrupt individuals using their power in the government to oppress others. She works both against those abusing their power in magical and non-magical communities. In her mind no one is too powerful to thwart justice and similarly problem is too small since smaller problems often hurt people which is her main focus. In each place she finds followers among the downtrodden and oppressed and helps lead them. Sometimes the oppressor is an important government official and sometimes it's as small as a local gang leader causing fear or darkness in a local community she's passing through. She rarely fights directly or takes the field herself instead using her gifts to bolster her followers to fight better and weaken her enemies. That being said she has been in enough scrapes that she's picked up some hand to hand fighting to be able to defend herself if needed. Anywhere there are those who exploiting others for their own gain should be wary of her rising up against them.
3) Write about your character's appearance. What do they look like? Are you planning on using a certain model for your character? If you already have a picture in mind, you can put it here!
She has pale skin and purple eyes. Still working on the rest and who I'm going to use as a model.
4) Is your character a Pure-Blood, Half-Blood or Muggle-Born? Do you have any notable magical relations? (Remember, you cannot be related to important characters from the Harry Potter Universe!)
Part-Spirit Nymph so Half-Breed.
5) Does your character have any special magical abilities? Or special abilities in general (photographic memory, etc.)? Is he or she of a different magical race, such as Veela, Vampire, Werewolf or the like? Part or half of that magical race counts! (Remember, you cannot have a character with special abilities/of a different magical race as one of your first two characters!)
Yes, Spirit Nymph. Their abilities are listed as follows:
- Able to sense auras (personality types, natural talents, etc).
- Aura sense can also be used to feel and understand other people's feelings, emotions, and desires.
- Aura sense can detect magical abilities (animagi, enchantments, other racial abilities, etc). This requires skin-on-skin contact.
For this specific character I'd also like to expand her emotion sensing abilities a little if approved and allow her to do a couple additional things expanding on the two last bullets above. Any time she uses these abilities her eyes glow bright purple so it's obvious she's doing it (so she can't just mess with your emotions without you realizing she's doing something even if you don't know what exactly she's doing).
- Aura sense can also be used to feel and understand other people's feelings, emotions, and desires. This can be done at range and in a wide area but those affected much be within sight. In addition it can be used to influence the emotions of those around her. This would be a subtle thing allowing her to slowly make someone who's angry calm or rev a peaceful crowd into a violent riot. It does take time and while she can do it without speaking it's much more effective (quicker) if she also uses words to help the gift work. Also since it's subtle those being affected might not notice it or assume it's their own emotions but if they realize it's not their own emotion they can choose to fight against it's effects. Those with any mental training or protection will be able to do this easily. Influencing people slowly drains her own energy and the more people she's trying to affect the more energy it takes.
- Aura sense can detect magical abilities (animagi, enchantments, other racial abilities, etc). This requires skin-on-skin contact. In addition she can push her emotions into someone she's touching causing them to be overwhelmed by the emotions she pushes. This can range from overwhelming bliss and joy to fear and despair. While they're affected she can make suggestions that go along with the emotion and the current state they're in and they will follow them as if in a dream-like state. Physical contact must be maintained or they'll begin to snap out of it and throw off the effects after they've completed one action. Those affected can fight against those suggestions especially if they go against something the character wouldn't normally do or if they've had mental training or protection. Doing this quickly drains her energy to the point where she might pass out if she does it too long and she must rest before doing it again. In addition she's pushing her emotions into them so she loses her own ability to feel emotions and can become apathetic in addition to physically tired which also takes time to recover from.
Examples are if in bliss suggesting they sleep or if they're in anger that they attack. If she stopped touching them the sleeping person would remain asleep but the angry person would begin to calm down after the attack and would regain control of themselves.
In addition to the limits I put above (energy limits and people can defend which in a RP combat context would basically mean I could post that she's trying to affect them and what she's trying to have them do as an attack and then they could try to defend with their mind (if the character is able or wants to) as a defense and the GM could determine how well it worked based on how good the defense was and if the characters would normally do a similar action or not) the character would also be limited by her magical schooling. She grew up fighting and would have picked up a wand (probably stolen) and would have learned a few spells but all her spells would be 3rd year or below and she'd only know maybe a dozen. She doesn't have the magical abilities of any full witch or wizard and in a magical duel without using her nymph abilities she'd not fare well. She would know just enough to be able to defend herself from their magic (like a shield spell) and rely on her other gifts.
6) What is your character's profession? Does your character plan to enroll your character into the Ministry of Magic? Does your character not work? Is your character a teacher?
Revolutionary Leader. Her plan is to gather a group of followers and begin a campaign against the current Ministry of Magic regime and it's oppression of the people.
A. Select the option that best fits your character. (Remember, this part is optional for adult characters!)
1. What are you looking forward to learning at Hogwarts the most?
- A. Transfiguration
- B. Hexes & Jinxes
- C. Magical Creatures
- D. The castle's secret areas
2. Pick one:
- A. Moon
- B. Stars
3. If flowers adapted their scent to attract the unwary, what would it smell of in order to lure you in?
- A. Freshly baked bread
- B. Parchment
- C. The Sea
- D. A crackling log fire
4. Pick one:
- A. Dawn
- B. Dusk
5. Four boxes are placed before you. Which one do you open?
- A. The ornate one, promising secret knowledge and unbearable temptation
- B. The small, pewter box that reads "I only open for the worthy"
- C. The gleaming black box marked with Merlin's rune
- D. The small, tortoiseshell box, embellished in gold, with a small, squeaking creature
6. Pick one:
- A. White
- B. Black
7. What road tempts you the most?
- A. The cobbled street lined with ancient buildings
- B. The narrow, dark, lantern-lit alley
- C. The twisting, leaf-strewn path through woods
- D. The wide, sunny, grassy lane
8. Pick one:
- A. Forest
- B. River
9. What scares you most?
- A. Speaking in such a silly voice, people will laugh at you and mock you
- B. An eye at the keyhole of the dark, windowless room where you're locked
- C. Standing on top of something high, without anything to stop you from falling
- D. Waking up and realizing your family & friends don't know you
10. It's late, you're walking alone, and hear a peculiar cry you believe has a magical source. What do you do?
- A. Draw your wand & search for the source
- B. Proceed with caution, keep a hand on the concealed wand, and keep an eye out
- C. Draw your wand & stand your ground
- D. Wait for developments, while mentally reviewing the most appropriate spells
B. Whilst the first two questions will not affect the character's house (and are mandatory), the others are designed specifically to help users come up with their character's ideal job (and are optional).
1) Is this your first character?
- A. This is my first character.
- B. No, this is not my first character.
2) If your answer to the previous question is B, how many characters do you have? How many of them are "exotic"? If you do have exotic characters, please list both the name and the type of exotic. Remember you are only allowed one of each type with the exception of nymphs.
Need to rework the numbers since CK took some of her characters back but I think I currently have 6 active characters with 1 being exotic.
3) What would people who know your character well say they're really good at?
Influencing emotions. Speaking. Leading. Fighting oppression.
4) What do they really want to avoid in their job/career? Do they hate working in an office? Do they hate the field?
Being along. She is a social creature and relies on being able to connect with others. In addition due to her magical education she doesn't have the magical knowledge to perform most normal magical jobs as wand magic doesn't come to her easily.
5) Aside from family and peers, what motivates your character the most in life? What drives their passion?
Injustice. Seeing people hurt or oppressed. Fighting against those who do wrong (in her estimation) on both a government level and on an individual level.
6) Where does your character's weaknesses lie?
Her Nymph abilities draw on her own emotions and energy so as she uses them they drain her. She also relies on other people and without them she would be much more vulnerable. She has weak magical skills and can't do complex spells. Finally he abilities stem from her own emotions so if she were to be conflicted about something or emotionally drained she would be unable to use them.
7) Wand cores and woods speak volumes about a person's character. What is your character's wand? Why does it answer to them?
Not sure yet...it would probably be a stolen wand so I may randomly generate it.
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Hiiii so, there's a few things that I want to address.
- I understand she was left at an orphanage and wouldn't know her own parents ic but is it okay to add the parent meeting in the history. Really just because she is an exotic character and the parent meeting is more important in this situation. Plus, you state she isn't Syrian so it raises the question about how she got to that orphanage which I feel needs some clarification on how she got there, even if she doesn't know herself.
- Added a paragraph about this including adding an original name: Sarah Personne. If you want we can re-name the sorting forum to that.
- The character doesn't have a first magical incident, which is definitely required (usually between 4-10). This would alert magical officials, thus drawing their attention to Dawn. How would she have avoided them and attending a magical school?
- I added first magical incident. My thought (if you want me to write this up let me know) is that in that part of the world there's less magical scrutiny (probably less magical government too) and that since Helgenish has some magical abilities and she was in his care it was assumed he would tell her about magic and either school her himself or send her to an appropriate magical school the same way a parent in Englad would be assumed to do.
- Can you go into more detail about Helgenish? I'm assuming he's a wizard or some sort of magical being?
- Yes, I added that more explicitly in the backstory. I was just thinking he was a normal wizard who decided to use his abilities to prey on others.
- Like the parent meeting, I know Dawn disregards her surname but it is policy that characters have to have two names. Maybe she gives herself one?
- I added an original name...we can rename the forum to that (Sarah Personne) if that will work? If you'd still like me to add a surname to Dawn I can probably think of something.
- In regards to her powers, as you acknowledged, they are rather OP. But, I know Frost is currently working on the nymph revamp and maybe you could message her with your idea? I'd rather there be a standard across all characters in regards to what power they have in order to make it be fair. Though I acknowledge you did put restrictions on her powers. I just don't believe it's fair that one nymph might have those extended powers when another spirit nymph wouldn't. If Frost (and in extension, the admin team as they do need to approve it when she's done) believes it to be fair, then she can include it into the nymph revamp, which would make it standard for powers.
- I owled her and I'm seeing if we can make that work. I'll let you know if that's approved or not since this can't be approved until that is because the character and backstory really are built on the abilities and it wouldn't work without them.
- In regards to her profession, could you provide some countries that she helped cause a revolution or other incidents? I really ask just to avoid countries who haven't gone through conflict in the past twenty years in real life so that we don't change the world too much. In regards to ministry of magic in the UK, while I don't believe gathering people behind her would need approval, actually campaign against the ministry would need to be worked with AI but you have said you're willing to work with the admin team.
- I added a couple more paragraphs detailing history for the last few years. IC there was a magical war a few years back (probably mostly covered up for the muggles) so there has been some turmoil in the magical world at least that she could have participated in. Her scope was never supposed to be toppling governments but usually on a much smaller scale so I elaborated on that also to make that clear. If someone takes down or kills a corrupt government official in a South American country or a gang leader somewhere few people notice. I never intended to insinuate she just went around overthrowing governments though from what I had I understand why you might have thought that. Also it should be noted (though I don't know where I could here) that she does her best not to kill if she doesn't have to. She has killed and will to achieve her goals but she tries to hold herself to a higher standard than that so don't think of her as someone going around knocking off important people.
As for working with the admin team and AI team I already talked to Jay since she was doing the Riot and she was fine with Dawn being part of the reason that kicks off. I know she's not part of the AI team but she was working with them on that event which will be the kicking off point. From there anything else will of course continue to be worked with the AI team.
- I added a couple more paragraphs detailing history for the last few years. IC there was a magical war a few years back (probably mostly covered up for the muggles) so there has been some turmoil in the magical world at least that she could have participated in. Her scope was never supposed to be toppling governments but usually on a much smaller scale so I elaborated on that also to make that clear. If someone takes down or kills a corrupt government official in a South American country or a gang leader somewhere few people notice. I never intended to insinuate she just went around overthrowing governments though from what I had I understand why you might have thought that. Also it should be noted (though I don't know where I could here) that she does her best not to kill if she doesn't have to. She has killed and will to achieve her goals but she tries to hold herself to a higher standard than that so don't think of her as someone going around knocking off important people.
I know you acknowledged that this character would be unusual to approve and that most times it wouldn't go through, which I agree with. If she were an expansion character, I'd be more lenient as it would explain why she's such a powerful and influential character in regards to international politics. While I don't want to impede on character creativity, I do want to make sure it's fair on everyone and that a handful of users don't have OP characters whilst if anyone else tried, they would be most likely denied.
- So I have no issues with her being an expansion character since her primary goal/purpose right now really is to give the Ministry some opposition since currently the general populace has just done what the Ministry wanted without any real outcry or fight. A one sided fight isn't fair or really interesting...so hopefully this will help kick things up a little with what's going on with the Ministry. Of course I will work with AI since I don't want to wreck any of their plans...but since nothing really active is happening right now this could be some action until the next big thing from them.
All that being said I didn't submit it as an Expansion character because I feel like I might want to keep it after the expansion and it seems wrong to me to get it approved as a character with extra abilities just for the expansion knowing I might want to keep it afterwards. Of course since she won't need such drastic abilities after the expansion if you would be ok with it I would be willing to use her as is for now and call her an expansion character while the Nymph stuff and powers get sorted and when the expansion ends if I want to keep her find a way to bring her powers more in line with whatever gets written/approved or limit her powers though injuries or some other IC means.
Thanks again for actually consider the character and being willing to work with me on it.
Been through some bad shit, I should be a savage, who woulda thought it'd turn me to a sad bitch?
This has been sorted with the condition that the powers have been limitted and are to be changed with the upcoming nymph revamp.